ComingInto my wits
The pieces start to click
The knife wound in my side was mute,
Pain quit.
Nowhere
Was Jack to be,
He'd meshed inside you see
It's plain to know he always was
Part me.
This house
I stumbled on
I'd lost my way within
A Dante's home where I would pay
My sin.
Now my
Guarded secret
My other half interred
Was working to break free of me
Alert.
Fireflies
Buzz around me
They led me to a hole
A passageway to who knows where,
My soul?
Before /I scramble out/
I reach up to my right/
From there I take a jar contains/
One eye.
I'm Jack/
I say to I /
And now this house I know;/
It's where I've brought my souvenirs/
For show.
Somewhere
A stranger stands
Not knowing what her fate
Or that her Jack is lurking near--
I'm late!
....is this the horrible ending, or just a mistake? For past episodes look under 'cinquain' over to the right on the sometin' sometin' sidebar. Or >click<
20 comments:
Powerful stuff. Thank you for educating me on what that style was called. Happy TT!
Nice one!;)and how can you draw like that?Awesome!
I just watched AMC's The Prisoner, and this is rife with the same philosophies. Well, I think so anyway.
Love it.
You are so unique! I really am lost, but you are so unique! :)
Thanks Skip
Thanks Candi
Thanks Otin
Hey Jeff, I watched most of that and was intrigued, I think i saw the ending, but I'm not entirely sure...it's weird stuff.
Happy tt Tom!
"Coming
Into my wits
The pieces start to click
The knife wound in my side was mute,
Pain quit."
I really, really love that.
Great piece.
I haven't read your cinquain's for some time. Loved the etchings. The bottom one really seemed to flow with this.
The husband was just talking about The Prisoner last night.
Bravo! Always Take Your Souvenirs With You.
"Dante's home where I would pay My sin." Love it. And I liked the jar with the eye, too!
oh deliciously creepy...souveniers...i wonder will there be more? happy tt!
Loved this:
"Somewhere
A stranger stands
Not knowing what her fate
Or that her Jack is lurking near--
I'm late!"
Ooh...The Ripper lurks....The illustrations are also wonderful..This was so original and creative..Thanks for sharing...
Wonderful marriage of words and lines. An excellent TT post.
I have to read twice!!! Good stuff. Always enjoy your drawings...how long does it take to do them...so detailed!
Love the first stanza best...
Yikes! I think this is great on it's own. Nice form! -J
thanks all...Jill, took me maybe 20 or 30 minutes to do this drawing...my old printer wouldn't work with windows 7, so i've had to do without a scanner for a bit, but now all's good again--that means i need to start doodling again.
Could not find a suitable section so I written here, how to become a moderator for your forum, that need for this?
This house is hanging from the cliff by its fingernails.
This is beautiful - and powerful, wow! I kept thinking, as I read (and re-read) it, THIS is EXACTLY why I spent ten years in psychotherapy. Just this. Oh yeah!!
Ouch!
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