here's my little contribution to the Think of the picture/doodle as
my main entry, and the rhyme as backup.
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their stories/pictures/poems.
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Subterfuge on Piedome Lane was a matter of course
where the cars purred like cats on all fours like a horse
and James Monroe Smith took his notes in a halter
with one leg in the air, and his chin to insult her.
Sally countered with punches to his neck and his spleen
and every contraption he owned inbetween
except it din't phase him, he gave her the eye
almost as if Sal had not even tried.
Coming upon the front of the back of the lane
the girl knew that James was ahead in the game
so she landed a kick that he had not seen coming
well below the neck
well below the belt
well that dastardly kick really was something.
Jimmy was stumped, no more tricks in his bag
in fact 'twas his sack that was mortally tagged
and Sally departed
stage left so it seems
to end all her quarrels
if you know what I means.
where the cars purred like cats on all fours like a horse
and James Monroe Smith took his notes in a halter
with one leg in the air, and his chin to insult her.
Sally countered with punches to his neck and his spleen
and every contraption he owned inbetween
except it din't phase him, he gave her the eye
almost as if Sal had not even tried.
Coming upon the front of the back of the lane
the girl knew that James was ahead in the game
so she landed a kick that he had not seen coming
well below the neck
well below the belt
well that dastardly kick really was something.
Jimmy was stumped, no more tricks in his bag
in fact 'twas his sack that was mortally tagged
and Sally departed
stage left so it seems
to end all her quarrels
if you know what I means.
19 comments:
That has a strange resemblance to Big Bird. Yes, I know my perception is weird... sue me.
"... 'twas his sack that was mortally tagged..." sounds like the beginning of a Half-Moose Christmas carol! Hah!
yikes. reminds me of soccer...
really cool doodle...the lines make his face look like crying...which i would be doing with a tagged sack...
This is a very successful character I think- it makes me think of people saying they "have baggage" - here, it's visible.
baggage..the inner workings..hidden secrets.
i like the idea
Aww poor James. Love this, very funny . . so that's what yer innards looks likes. (still going 'ouch' at the tagged sack)
I do know what you means :)!
Sally found her inner Bruce Lee.
That doodle mighty fine,
mighty fine.
thanks...if you haven't already, clicking makes it larger, and clicking again makes it bigger yet. there's a lot of detail inside the dude
A Job well Done Sally!
This opening "Subterfuge on Piedome Lane" is super! I thought Big Bird when I saw the body, too. Fun. I jumped into Tenth Daughter this time, as well.
Oh, and I forgot to mention how much I like your new snazzy look!
thanks...i think the black background will set off the doodles better than the pale yellow. plus it makes me seem a thousand times cooler than i am.
The drawing is perfect. Hey. Mama said there'd be days like this.
He should be kicked just for his messy hair. Hmmf.
Tell that guy to puts his eyeballs back in his 'ead!
Style style, all style. Well, your kind of style, which should be out there hooked up to a profit machine. (That just sounds wrong, I know, but your style is so formidably you, ya know.)
Fun write.
xo
erin
E, that's nice of you to say. i pretty much feel the same about your 'all style'. removable eyeballs sounds like a good idea.
Nope, don't see Big Bird. But I do see the work of a funny writer and artist. This made me chuckle. And Sally? You go, girl!
So glad I found you! Loved your drawing. The details are amazing, and I liked the symbolism (or did I just imagine a ticking bomb near the digestive system???). Regardless, great verse to go with your great art. An artist times two. I'll be sure to come back!
Tina
P.S Missed the deadline this time...but I'll be back at 10DOM next round...
very good stuff, really liked this......especially
in fact 'twas his sack that was mortally tagged
priceless.
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