1 KgOne kilogram
One cagey
I Kay, gee
I wait you see
by your door
your window o'er
and the notes
drift to my ear
from on high
out your casement
hearing you play
your flat out of plumb
and a creak of wheels
rusty casters
against hardwood
and you play still,
Kay,
falling
into the street
a weight heavy
of polished triple-posted spruce
sees the light of day
and smashes with rider
195.044 Kg onto me.
16 comments:
ha. that one was a bit of fun....wonder if that guy is playing as he falls?
And was Kay playing in the key of GEE?
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Now that's what I call a crescendo.
:)
never a dull line!
a great take on the prompt...delightful!
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Well, what a waste of piano!
A flat note ending?
I have a piano like that. Can't play it tho. I'd enter this silly thing if I could write like you. And match it with a doodle of course.
rusty casters against hardwood... yikes, I hear it rolling toward the window!
Okay! Fine wordplay!
Heaveeeeee Kay man. When the street hits the casters, and the spring hits on the sprong, what beautiful music you make before you hear flat in kay of g. Imaginative +++. Superb and articulation of written art masterpiece! Reminds me of an exploding piano for some reason from Groucho Marx and company. WoW!
Oh that made me laugh :).
I like the rhythm in this piece. It's fun to read out loud.
I like the drawing and poem. Very interesting take on the prompt.
Funny piece - and very well written too. It was even more enjoyable on my second reading.
At first I thought a stream of consciousness but it all came together at the end very cleverly.
That's probably the most imaginative post I've read (haven't read them all yet, though!)
(Ha! Just seen my word ID is "ounse")
Super doodle!
This piece is fun to read out loud.
"195.044 Kg onto me"
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